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mentalrazorback (2)
Monday, May 10, 2010

lyrics

Current mood: meh

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so this morning i wrote this and posting it cause i think its pretty good. tell me what ya think and if you have a riff to add comment it XD
 
Im so numb right now
tried to stop it , i dont know how
hours pass, couldnt sleep
what the hell happened? i havnt heard a peep in a week
id loved you forever, now youve told this lie.
tell me baby why was there another guy? 
 
venom courses through my veins!
a galloping horse and the devil controls the reins!
pills i swollow! in blood i wallow!
 
i love you stil i hope you do too.
cant see a damn thing without thinking of you
darling please, come back home, i cant stand being alone
your all that i have, dont go away
 
venom courses through my veins!
a galloping horse and the devil controls the reins!
pills i swollow! in blood i wallow!
 
its been a month now, why wont your write?
this noose in our room, but i dont have the might
a letter with your scent, smells fresh like pepperment
"honey im sorry" it began "im comming home now i love you forevermore" then it ended
tears build up but strenght defended. my baby is home!
oh thank god your home! kisses placed on your lips as we embrace
memories of the past have been erased
 
 
so thats it, again if you have a riff idea let me know and same goes for lyrics :wavey:
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mentalrazorback wrote on May 16th, 2010 9:38pm

Bit depressing maybe? Also I have no idea how fast you'll have to sing the 4th line in the final verse if you're trying to keep it in time... :P Good though man but it feels a tiny bit unhinged when it gets to the chorus. Dunno if it suits but then again hard to tell without music or a melody behind it.... Good work though man.

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loki'scursea wrote on May 17th, 2010 12:27am

mentalrazorback wrote on May 16th, 2010 at 4:38pm :
Bit depressing maybe? Also I have no idea how fast you'll have to sing the 4th line in the final verse if you're trying to keep it in time... :P Good though man but it feels a tiny bit unhinged when it gets to the chorus. Dunno if it suits but then again hard to tell without music or a melody behind it.... Good work though man.
well if youve listened to 'the end' by BFMV, it feels like that..soft verses, and heavy chorus, maybe i could attempt singing it for reference?

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loki'scursea wrote on Jan 7th, 2011 9:27pm

kinda looks shitty....and makes me not want to remember those memories....

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