You are seem to be off key quite a bit and your voice is a bit shaky. Also, I haven't heard the original song, but you seem too quiet while your singing and and not very prominent; like you are not really trying to display your vocal abilities and you are just doing a song. Don't get me wrong, this wasn't a horrible rendition of the song, but there are definitely things you need to work on. You also might want to work on articulating yourself a bit better, and I know it's not that easy when you are focusing on many things at once, but it was a tad bit hard to understand what you were saying at some points. You have potential, but you might want to improve on the things I noted and after that I'm sure you'll be better. Keep it up and don't get discouraged. Just have confidence in your voice and you'll connect with the listener much better. Good luck!

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