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eaton1012 (1)
Thursday, April 02, 2009

Human Perfection

Current mood: calm

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Comments: 2
Point the finger
Push the blame
Then the other do the same
Fight  your  battle  once  again
this criticisms gone to your head
Perfect beings don't exist
For  many  things  we all regret
Whats your take on humanity
What kind of flaw exists in me
Don't push hypocritical blame at me
Don't  point your  finger
Don't  Fuck  with  me
Your  Judgmental mind is blind
Talking shit all the time 

just stuff I wrote in school.not sh*t else to do.
Please crit

3:14 am - 2 comments - 1 Kudos - Report!
BoxMonster wrote on Apr 2nd, 2009 3:38am

Interesting... I like it. You might need to tweak the rhythm/syllables in a few lines to get it to work, but it looks pretty good.


NightEmbers wrote on Apr 2nd, 2009 3:46am

its ight... if you wanna sound like a good lyricist I'd get rid of the profanity lol not like we dont all cuss but as a writer you wanna use stronger more controversial words with bigger impact... because shit and fuck just doesnt mean anything


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